CAMPIN!

[Bunx]

going camping. with found family!
get that map. bunx and Alisa
are off to the land,
were bunx and Alisa can be there;
to the pad of nowhere.

yoyoyo, we are going camping,
no flapping fake wings here.
bunx and Alisa will be wrapping our fish
in foil and potatoes too.
bunx can cook, you all can dance
and dab the night away.

bunx,
waking up before the camp does,
to escape to the land of
prior earthquake. but
bunxs growl
will not wake the Henderson the Bear,
and the Hendersons cry will not
make the campers leave.

but bunx will make Bunx shake

"mighty Hendersons"
bunx will sit here and watch the grizzlys.

the grizzlys can watch me
atop of gentrifiction's glen. were we are
friends.

going camping Alisa,
bunx came back.

[Malu]

going camping. girl! Start off with a capital, and capitalize girl, after all it did follow a period.
get that map. we Same error here
are off to the land,
were we can be there;
to the pad of nowhere. Confusing and unclear.

man. we are going camping, Same error as previously stated.
no flapping fake wings here.
we will be wrapping our fish Same error.
in foil and potatoes too.
i can cook, you all can dance How do you not capitalize "i"
and dab the night away.

waking up before the camp does, Same error.
to escape to the land of
prior earthquake. but my Same error.
growl will not wake the bear,
and the bears cry will not
make the campers shake.

but you will make me shake Would you like at that, the same error! You're on a roll.
mighty grizzly. ill sit here and There it is again. "ill" are you sick? It should be I'll.
watch you. you can watch me Surprise surprise, that pesky error again.
atop of devils glen. were we are Of course that error is here too.
friends.

going camping girl, And here.
and i never came back. And the last line, nothing different, failure to capitalize something so simple as "i"

The poor grammar just indicates rushing and lack of effort. Did you even read this over once before posting it? The story isn't bad, but the grammar definitely doesn't help.