Invisible to beauty

[ruagun]

Invisible to beauty

He sees beauty blissfully walking by [cool alliteration with the Bs!]
Oh the wonderful feeling she gives him [this is an empty line - shore it up with an image. something "hard."]
Makes his yearning heart cry [this is a bit generic =[ try another image - piggyback it off my suggested image above]

His mind would sense her presence 
Then she would appear
But beauty's eyes knows not of him [I'd change it to "know" for proper grammar ("eyes know"), unless I am mistaken!]
For his shyness is always there

Maybe one day one day he wish [I WANT to say ditch "one day" x2 but...I like it! It makes me think of longing. Nice!]
To stand and fight his fears
So beauty may know of him
And to know he was always there

Edited

My first ever poem.
Dedicated to my upstairs neighbor who doesn't know that i have a crush on her.

Some general notes on the poem, along with my own comments in brackets:

Overall, it's not a bad whack for a first poem, if I do say so myself! I do think you sacrifice your poem's flow/clarity in your sentence structure. You're kind of putting round pegs in square holes in that regard. I think you may want to tailor your poem a bit to make it more "structurally sound" - first, paring down a poem is usually a good start. Get rid of extraneous words (see my comment about stanza 3's first line), remove adverbs (adverbs should be used sparingly, from what I've encountered - but that's always up to opinion!), etc.

Another good idea is to ditch "generic" words. For example, the first line: "He sees beauty." Okay, that's all well and good, but what if you chose a word that has a different connotation to it. What if you say, "he spies beauty..." That gives it that kind of voyeuristic and detached feeling, like the speaker in the song "Every Breath You Take" by the Police. Or you can try other synonyms for the word "sees." I think you can find a more fitting word. Same for the line "for shyness is always there." I think you can try something like, "shyness dwells" or "shyness creeps" or SOMETHING to present the reader with the idea that the shyness is always there without..well, without outright saying it. SHOW, DON'T TELL. =]

This is my first critique on this site. I hope this was helpful and I think you've done a great job here. It's hard to get your stuff out there. I'd love to see some edits on this from you. I'd also love to see more of your stuff.

Good luck!

Thank you so much beta life for you opinion,
you may have just giving me inspiration for my next piece.