09-04-2013, 12:22 AM
The first part reminds me of the "girl from ipanema".
Throughout the poem it seems as though a lot of clarity is sacrificed for the sake of rhyming. However, for a first try you show some promise.
Dale
Throughout the poem it seems as though a lot of clarity is sacrificed for the sake of rhyming. However, for a first try you show some promise.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.