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Sorrow
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08-31-2013, 04:46 PM
(08-31-2013, 02:12 PM)Obloquy Wrote: Last line first segment you made a small spelling error. "Will be teared apart by this dark desert's fire." Teared should be replaced with torn. Overall I love the theme and idea of your poem. Nice work.Two. Presence. Lighted is arcaic. Lit. As says this mod, too. Crit first. Be fair. Follow the rules. Good to see you posting but... Tectak |
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Sorrow - by casper-zakelijk - 08-31-2013, 10:01 AM
RE: Sorrow - by Obloquy - 08-31-2013, 02:12 PM
RE: Sorrow - by tectak - 08-31-2013, 04:46 PM
RE: Sorrow - by cidermaid - 08-31-2013, 04:28 PM
RE: Sorrow - by casper-zakelijk - 08-31-2013, 06:06 PM
RE: Sorrow - by tectak - 08-31-2013, 11:38 PM
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