08-31-2013, 02:12 PM
Last line first segment you made a small spelling error. "Will be teared apart by this dark desert's fire." Teared should be replaced with torn. Overall I love the theme and idea of your poem. Nice work.
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Sorrow - by casper-zakelijk - 08-31-2013, 10:01 AM
RE: Sorrow - by Obloquy - 08-31-2013, 02:12 PM
RE: Sorrow - by tectak - 08-31-2013, 04:46 PM
RE: Sorrow - by cidermaid - 08-31-2013, 04:28 PM
RE: Sorrow - by casper-zakelijk - 08-31-2013, 06:06 PM
RE: Sorrow - by tectak - 08-31-2013, 11:38 PM
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