The End of The World

[BillyM]

Thank you for your feedback and I completely agree with everything you've said. Reading back, it does feel very flat; rather than going for a random dream style, I'm going to give it more of a narrative, and emphasise the apocalyptic imagery. The end really doesn't work as well. I think I'll eliminate the rhyming all together, from what I've learned on the forum, rhyme isn't neccesary. I don't know what I was thinking with the line spacing...