08-29-2013, 02:14 PM
Hi, I quite enjoy the start of your poem but it becomes somewhat confusing after
One thing i noticed is the line spacing and how it interferes with what i presume to be the poems rhyme scheme. At some points in your poem a rhyme scheme seems to exist, and at others does not seem to exist.
One thing i noticed is the line spacing and how it interferes with what i presume to be the poems rhyme scheme. At some points in your poem a rhyme scheme seems to exist, and at others does not seem to exist.