The End of The World

[BillyM]

Thanks for the helpful feedback, I'm going to work on the poem using your suggestions (without copying them). I agree that using "and" so many times doesn't work very well, as well as the part in the market square. I didvintend it to be softer, kinda like "gently taking this stuff they have no use for" I'm considering removing the "fist fight with an old friend" part, or altering it to make it less random. (It was a random-ass dream). BTW could you please explain the difference between structure and prose? I want it to be consistent in that regard.

Thanks again