And Then I Look Away (edit 1)

[milo]

maybe I finally have gotten around to posting something...

And Then I Look Away

I have become caught in traffic.
It's seven-thirty and I know
a half-hour later it would not be
so much so. But I keep staring,
forcing the car between the lines,
because life demands the paycheck
and the paycheck demands the hour
and the hour demands that I sit,
a face trapped behind the windshield,
caught among all these wheels and all
these shields. And sometimes I catch a set
of eyes sealed in their own lined world.
Sometimes they also catch mine.

nearly everyone lives a mundane life, innit.

You know that film with Micheal Douglas? Falling down? You watched that and then you wrote this, yeah?

This is interesting commentary but not really up to the standards of serious critique. Please try to elaborate what you think works/doesn't work using specifics from the poem

/mod