Buggies

[tectak]

Chug chug chug huff, There is an infantile quality (perhaps the wrong word) to this opener which though I am sure you did not intend you choose to leave as is. I cannot say that there is anything to redeem it's puerile construction except for better (some) punctuation. No. chug chug chug huf does nothing for me.
man this engine sure ruffs ...but it continues, trapped in onomatopoeia. Huffs and ruffs? Lets just make words up. I would go luffs and tuffs.
and puffs on the roughsorry bunx. ruff and rough? You are jesting. Desperate forcing of rhyme makes you make irrational and pointless decisions on line end breaks. If you can tell me why it is a good idea to put "dirt road" on its own line APART from some indolent attempt to get a rhyme I am listening.
dirt road.

Traveling eastward
to America, land of
the unknown. Not since Christoper Columbus. Nonsense line.

Where do you we go,I we don't know. Where do I you think we?Check basic errors before posting. See forum rules
what do we think?
These wheels must take us
to the brink of discovery This makes little sense. Why to the brink? Why not the whole way? How will you know when you are on the brink? Scrap this stanza. Frankly, I think you already have. It says nothing in twenty or so words.

The land of milk and honey. cliche gulch
People mining far in hiding.
For a pile of gold or a cliche
sweet delight. Cliche but the stanza is gobbledygook anyway. It is so badly expressed that it can only be deliberate. The punctuation is incompetent. You are better than this, I know you are. Read it through

Buggies going to and fro. cliche
When I was a child,
I looked forward to the horse...and I am sure the horse anticipated your arrival with unbridled joy. Ridiculous line break. Depressing.
drawn night.

Now a look around "a" or "I"?
seeing a blur of colors colourful cliche
on a landscape I have
never seen. Huh? If you have never seen it how can you...oh, I can't be bothered. You know what I mean.

America, seeing
is believing. CLICHE! Hurrah for the cliche! What would we all do without them?

Hi bunx,
Well, what happened?
Best,
tectak