Falling

[billy]

lots to like Keith. it's a great attempt at a sonnet and the meter is almost nailed. i'm presuming falling is falling in love? thanks to leanne and milo and trueenigma, i'm beginning to see the worth of breaking the strict iambic meter, i'd go over it though to make sure you know where it did break from it's strictness.
solid love poem, i enjoyed the read.

You're dancing barefoot in the morning dew,
to lose yourself in nature's waking call.
Garden freshness seems to breathe through you a suggestion would be [the garden's freshness ....] in order to reclaim the lost half foot
and spiders spin their webs lest you should fall.
Your lips sip pure water from a flower, i stumbled here a bit on the meter.
that bows its head before it takes your hand.
The traces left by heavy summer showers i'd lose the s off showers to make a perfect rhyme
have given grace to eyes that watch you stand. a suggestion would be to lose [have] in order to make the two lines have an even meter of +and - half a foot, (milo or leane can explain it better than i
The moment breaks with noises in the street,
you turn your smile and see me move away.
The paving stones are patterned by damp feet, a great image
that follow me to arms that hold your sway.
The sweetest rain taps windows once again,
our first embrace adds colour to the frame. again/frame just make it as slant rhyme (i think)