08-09-2013, 04:05 AM
Oh dear, I'm feeling like I can't take a bit of critism, but I read your 'the rhyming wasn't consistant' and said 'oh yes it is' lol
hope, rope, daft, laughed
time, sublime, threadbare, there
I'm at a bit of a loss as to what to change things too really, cos at his cruel words, I laughed (whilst crying on the inside) heh
sorry, I think perhaps I should try with another poem that I'm more willing to be swayed by opinion on.
thankyou for reading it and bothering to comment, it's appreciated
hope, rope, daft, laughed
time, sublime, threadbare, there
I'm at a bit of a loss as to what to change things too really, cos at his cruel words, I laughed (whilst crying on the inside) heh
sorry, I think perhaps I should try with another poem that I'm more willing to be swayed by opinion on.
thankyou for reading it and bothering to comment, it's appreciated