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'kus are not really my area of expertise (I'm far too verbose!), but I do love that first line. I'm not sure the punctuation adds anything and for personal preference I'd have left out "the" in the second line, but the whole thing is quite profound -- and I certainly wouldn't argue with the depth of sentiment herein Smile
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Ink - by ChristopherSea - 08-09-2013, 03:25 AM
RE: Senryu - by Leanne - 08-09-2013, 04:00 AM
RE: Senryu - by ChristopherSea - 08-09-2013, 04:17 AM
RE: Ink - by newsclippings - 08-09-2013, 05:42 PM
RE: Ink - by ChristopherSea - 08-09-2013, 06:48 PM
RE: Ink - by ChristopherSea - 08-09-2013, 10:13 PM
RE: Ink - by ChristopherSea - 08-10-2013, 10:45 AM



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