dogged

[makeshift]

I agree with most of what TheWall0912 said. I like the first stanza the most. Overall the poem just felt rough to me in some places. Certainly some good lines and nice rhyming in there. (:

Your fading light is fainter
than it ever was before,
your filigreed wall is denser now Not sure if I like filigreed here, feels unnatural in context
than when you gave me more. Maybe im overlooking something but this line feels a bit vague
I'm not sure how it happened,
but you slowly slipped away, This part feels a bit redundant given you opened the poem with "your fading light is fainter" to me it almost seems to say the same thing but again perhaps i''m overlooking something
to out of reach and out of touch
of the games we used to play.

I never expected anything
but I had a ray of hope,
that curled around emotions
like a pale pink silken rope. Not sure what a pale pink silken rope is but I like the way this line read (:
My intellect tried to tell me
that I was lurching into daft,
but starlight reflected in your eyes
and at your cruel words, I laughed. This line feels a bit wordy

I thought my love of angst
would carry on, for never-ending time, From about here onward the flow suffers some imo.
a chequered quilt of constant warmth
that made me feel sublime.
But it's fraying at the edges
with patches of threadbare,
I'll carry on regardless though
till I'm left with nothing there.

Center alignment made commenting on this a bit wonky > . <