Untitled poem from a new poet...
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For what it is, it feels fine to me.

Some parts could use a finer tuning, and some tightening up. But not really. It's good to have some looseness in a thing like this.
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Untitled poem from a new poet... - by alatos - 08-05-2013, 02:23 AM
RE: Untitled poem from a new poet... - by rowens - 08-05-2013, 02:35 AM
RE: Untitled poem from a new poet... - by jdguyb - 08-05-2013, 04:37 AM
RE: Untitled poem from a new poet... - by alatos - 08-05-2013, 08:37 AM
RE: Untitled poem from a new poet... - by friedmouse420 - 08-05-2013, 08:54 AM
RE: Untitled poem from a new poet... - by billy - 08-05-2013, 05:53 PM
RE: Untitled poem from a new poet... - by alatos - 08-07-2013, 11:08 AM
RE: Untitled poem from a new poet... - by Zabrina - 08-07-2013, 08:45 PM
RE: Untitled poem from a new poet... - by alatos - 08-08-2013, 03:07 AM
RE: Untitled poem from a new poet... - by rowens - 08-08-2013, 03:54 AM
RE: Untitled poem from a new poet... - by billy - 08-10-2013, 06:09 PM
RE: Untitled poem from a new poet... - by alatos - 08-13-2013, 09:04 AM



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