08-02-2013, 11:00 AM
The broad expanse of heather
spreads out over rolling hills
Nature's purple garment clothes
the moorland with cushioned finery
waterfowl alight and ripple
mirrored planes of silvered calm
kitty hawks in search as targets
float and dance on spiral winds
many pleasurable days spent
roaming tranquil Pennine paths
i've lengthened the lines, and add words to make it read better, over the next day or two I'll think as to how to make it more personal and try and give it some better imagery and depth. i can see that as is, (per se
) it's not a good poem.
thanks so far for the help.
spreads out over rolling hills
Nature's purple garment clothes
the moorland with cushioned finery
waterfowl alight and ripple
mirrored planes of silvered calm
kitty hawks in search as targets
float and dance on spiral winds
many pleasurable days spent
roaming tranquil Pennine paths
i've lengthened the lines, and add words to make it read better, over the next day or two I'll think as to how to make it more personal and try and give it some better imagery and depth. i can see that as is, (per se
) it's not a good poem. thanks so far for the help.