08-01-2013, 01:06 PM
(07-31-2013, 10:45 PM)TheWall0912 Wrote: a raunchy, sordid sense of humorHi,
a piercing laugh heard for a mile
a scar from a childhood rumor
a crooked smile
a too tight bear hug
a different style
a large kissing bug
a need to protect
a prescription drug
my love, a side effect
perfectly imperfect
I'm normally not much for list like poems, but I think this one's got something. You have some good lines, my favorites being the two ending lines and L3. L6 felt a bit out of place, I felt it didn't add much. Perhaps you could word it to give the reader something a little more specific. JMHO of course.
-LB

