Carousel Blues

[milo]

I don't remember if I did to begin with.
"created lakes in neighbors' driveways so large--"
>>It adds another syllable. I don't actually think I'm bothered by it, but maybe I was when I initially wrote it.

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Do you like saying "birthed" out loud?

I can do an audio for it if you would like.

I think the strength gained though /pummeled/ over "would pummel" is worth not liking birthed.

I do like the new version better because (I am biased?) it reads right through without confusion, it is obvious without the need for a hyphen, but, like I said, maybe let someone else weigh in as no one else had a problem with it before.

(out of your 3 pictures I like this one the best so far as you seem happy about something so I feel like you are agreeing even when you are not)