07-29-2013, 03:52 AM
Thank you for your feedback, rowens and milo
I see what you mean about "farce", milo. I'm surprised that no-one commented on that vagueness when I published this elsewhere. In real life (this poem is based on a piece of graffiti I saw) the line was something like "to all downtrodden men, reclaim your masculinity, it's what women want". The repetition of "board" was deliberate; when I wrote this I'd been reading free verse poems by D. H. Lawrence, who uses repetition a lot.
I see what you mean about "farce", milo. I'm surprised that no-one commented on that vagueness when I published this elsewhere. In real life (this poem is based on a piece of graffiti I saw) the line was something like "to all downtrodden men, reclaim your masculinity, it's what women want". The repetition of "board" was deliberate; when I wrote this I'd been reading free verse poems by D. H. Lawrence, who uses repetition a lot.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe