07-29-2013, 12:30 AM
Thank you for your kind, thoughtful and in-depth critique, soonforgotten and ray, it's greatly appreciated
soonforgotten - The Pharisee's thumb line isn't a reference to anything. I've realised now that I shouldn't have capitalised pharisee, because in its lower case form it means, to quote dictionary.com, "a sanctimonious, self-righteous, or hypocritical person", which is the meaning I wanted. I'll edit that in a moment. In that line I wanted to convey the idea that Ian Curtis' music would be torture to self-righteous people, or those who have rigid, old-fashioned ideas about music.
It was not my intention to place myself opposite to God, so that's slightly embarrassing
I'm not a narcissist, I swear
ray - I agree with you about "in lines". I'll edit that out.
soonforgotten - The Pharisee's thumb line isn't a reference to anything. I've realised now that I shouldn't have capitalised pharisee, because in its lower case form it means, to quote dictionary.com, "a sanctimonious, self-righteous, or hypocritical person", which is the meaning I wanted. I'll edit that in a moment. In that line I wanted to convey the idea that Ian Curtis' music would be torture to self-righteous people, or those who have rigid, old-fashioned ideas about music.
It was not my intention to place myself opposite to God, so that's slightly embarrassing
I'm not a narcissist, I swearray - I agree with you about "in lines". I'll edit that out.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe