The Reasoning

[Wildcard]

the above is the wrong way to take feedback, if you can't use the feedback then don't use it, i hate some of the feedback i get for similar reasons but they took the time to respond and for that i'm extremely grateful. just clench your bum cheeks and let it pass. :J:

This is in serious critique. tectak is a mod so I assume he understands that 'give in to effort' is not an explanation of why or why not something is competent.

He obviously has something to add and I am eager to hear it. That is why I sought clarification. There is no malice in any of those words.

i see you did an edit mark.

small but it adds to the poem, specially the last line, lovers do often suffer in silence. the title is is also better.

Thank you. Still not happy with the title and thought of something different the moment I posted it, but now that doesn't feel right either.

I am hoping to stretch the ambiguity of 'lie' in the last line if I can think of a better cast of surrounding words.

Cheers for your thoughts.