Senryu

[Volaticus]

Makes me feel warm in this room

Hi there,
Thank you so much for commenting, it means a lot to me.
I'm glad it made you feel warm.
All my best,
Louise

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Very good and clever in a few ways, I've read it a few times and I've just noticed that even the word heatstroke has erotic connotations because of stroke.
I'm not sure if your title is asking a question or if it's just ironic. This has a lot of the aspects of a haiku like season and juxtaposition but I don't think it would be classed as a haiku because they are usually about nature, although it could be argued that there is an element of nature. I find that when in doubt call it a senryu... and then run away... fast.
Thanks for the read,
Mark

Hi Mark,
Thanks so much for your kind feedback. I'm happy that you enjoyed the poem. I tried to make a poem about heatstroke, but wanted a lot of sexual undertones.
I had a question mark in the title, cause I wasn't sure whether it was a haiku or a senryu. Thanks for the explanation. Based on yours and other helpful comments I've gotten, I think it's mostly a senryu.
My best,
Louise

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i think this is one of those that ray said could be either.
i'd say senryu, but only out of choice, it works with the sex aspct or with the dehydration aqspect as an image excellent

Hi billy,
Thanks for taking time to explain and comment. Much appreciated as always
My best,
Louise