07-26-2013, 07:33 AM
Very good and clever in a few ways, I've read it a few times and I've just noticed that even the word heatstroke has erotic connotations because of stroke.
I'm not sure if your title is asking a question or if it's just ironic. This has a lot of the aspects of a haiku like season and juxtaposition but I don't think it would be classed as a haiku because they are usually about nature, although it could be argued that there is an element of nature. I find that when in doubt call it a senryu... and then run away... fast.
Thanks for the read,
Mark
I'm not sure if your title is asking a question or if it's just ironic. This has a lot of the aspects of a haiku like season and juxtaposition but I don't think it would be classed as a haiku because they are usually about nature, although it could be argued that there is an element of nature. I find that when in doubt call it a senryu... and then run away... fast.
Thanks for the read,
Mark
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