Family Outings

[Volaticus]

i liked it but you may hate me for why

the line human ovation, it makes me think more of a pregnant woman than clapping and when you follow that by elephants wail which works on two levels it's almost effing perfect.

Hi billy,
I think your reason for liking my poem is absolutely excellent, so no hate here Thanks for commenting and for giving me a refreshingly different view on my poem that I had not seen myself.
My best,
Louise

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I do think a comma would work better. It's strictly personal preference, though, and not a deal breaker. The haiku is good either way.

Thanks a lot for answering my question