Family Outings

[Volaticus]

Volaticus, I like the images you captured. And I agree, "parading" is better.

Why the semicolon after L2? Would a comma work better?

Hi fogglethorpe,
Thanks for your feedback, I appreciate it and I'm glad to hear you like the images.
I put the semicolon, because I meant for the last line to represent the sad result of the first two lines. Would a comma still work better?
Thanks a lot again.
Best,
LB

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These images are really vivid and strong and work well together. Also it works on so many different levels depending on how it's read. When I first read it yesterday it felt like a very sad poem.
I like the aspect of three points of view based around the same situation, it's a bit like the film Mystery Train which if you haven't seen, makes my comment seem a little strange.
Thanks I enjoyed reading it.
Mark.

Hi Mark,
Thank you for your very kind and thoughtful comments. I am glad to hear that you enjoyed the poem. I must admit I don't know the movie, but I looked it up and read about it, so your comment doesn't seem strange at all
Thanks again.
My best,
Louise