07-21-2013, 11:47 PM
For contents this one got a chuckle from me.
I am not very up on the tanka form.
I know that (that like me) you are in the process of being set free from the stricter syllable count in this type of poetic form. So I thought it would be interesting to see where you are currently in your journey with this.
So here is my question:
One of the things I am trying to make my mind up on (and this is one of personal preference) is, should a Tanka, senyru or haiku keep some form of discipline in terms of a syllable count even if the count has been modified from the standard accepted count.
So for example we have both recently managed to write so efforts that are non standard
Your example here offers a count of: 3 /4/ 3/ 3 / 3. (As against the prescribed standard of a Tanka being 5/7/5/7/7 and according to my Google search! uses simile, metaphor and personification.).
To my ear and eye your offering still has a leaning towards a pattern that is identifiably tanka. I just wondered if this was pre-planned or had just evolved as you wrote. I ask because I perceive we are at a similar stage of experimentation with these forms.
Cheers and all the best AJ.
I am not very up on the tanka form.
I know that (that like me) you are in the process of being set free from the stricter syllable count in this type of poetic form. So I thought it would be interesting to see where you are currently in your journey with this.
So here is my question:
One of the things I am trying to make my mind up on (and this is one of personal preference) is, should a Tanka, senyru or haiku keep some form of discipline in terms of a syllable count even if the count has been modified from the standard accepted count.
So for example we have both recently managed to write so efforts that are non standard
Your example here offers a count of: 3 /4/ 3/ 3 / 3. (As against the prescribed standard of a Tanka being 5/7/5/7/7 and according to my Google search! uses simile, metaphor and personification.).
To my ear and eye your offering still has a leaning towards a pattern that is identifiably tanka. I just wondered if this was pre-planned or had just evolved as you wrote. I ask because I perceive we are at a similar stage of experimentation with these forms.
Cheers and all the best AJ.