07-20-2013, 04:27 AM
Neat. On first read I wasn't convinced; it didn't grab me and felt overly familiar. However, re-reading a few times quickly and letting it just flow, it's grown.
I think I'd be tempted to lose the whole line of "to the surface" leaving "words / flowing" as then the feel matches the description more closely. And probably drop the comma after "again".
But me like; me relate.
I think I'd be tempted to lose the whole line of "to the surface" leaving "words / flowing" as then the feel matches the description more closely. And probably drop the comma after "again".
But me like; me relate.