07-17-2013, 05:34 PM
Hi Billy,
I'm not going to even attempt to get involved with the above discussion but had a question related to the thread of thought going on here.
In my original post I was not actually thinking of if I was writing a Haiku or a senyru. I was just trying to show how I had intreprested the poem from ray.
So I came up with:-
The image of the eyes of love looking at an older person and seeing new and fresh beauty there.
...so if I was to apply any attempt at punctuation to show this thought line, I would probably do this:
The look of you -
spring looks, in
old painting.
So my question is (ignoring for a moment if it is a Haiku or a senyru...because with in as a line end it is probably rubbish either way)
would you still say this was metaphor rather than just conrete image of what was seen? (I am getting really confused over this
)
Should we move this to a discussion board? (Appoligies again ray for the interuption in your poem thread)
I'm not going to even attempt to get involved with the above discussion but had a question related to the thread of thought going on here.
In my original post I was not actually thinking of if I was writing a Haiku or a senyru. I was just trying to show how I had intreprested the poem from ray.
So I came up with:-
The image of the eyes of love looking at an older person and seeing new and fresh beauty there.
...so if I was to apply any attempt at punctuation to show this thought line, I would probably do this:
The look of you -
spring looks, in
old painting.
So my question is (ignoring for a moment if it is a Haiku or a senyru...because with in as a line end it is probably rubbish either way)
would you still say this was metaphor rather than just conrete image of what was seen? (I am getting really confused over this
)Should we move this to a discussion board? (Appoligies again ray for the interuption in your poem thread)