Watching Out edit 1 milo

[tectak]

I like this a lot, tec. Wonderfully descriptive, disturbing images of a familiar scenario. I can feel the sigh of relief here:
"4 a.m. Home. Safe. Seventeen. Safe". Those little buggers, been there! thankfully, she is breathing. As you have declared, Hardened kittens would be hard to swallow, even hardened breast (at 17) won't do. The mention of her breasts seems gratuitous and doesn't really add anything to this fine piece of writing. Enjoyed it very much.
My best!
Heart

Hi heart,
believe me, I thought hard and long about the budding breast bit but in the end decided it was best to leave it in as it conjures up so many parental paradigms...note that you are not supposed to know whether it is father or mother doing the night shift! Either way it evokes that peculiarly sad moment when you realise that your daughter is growing up and growing away from childhood...and you.
Best and thanks,
tectak