07-15-2013, 05:19 PM
I like this a lot, tec. Wonderfully descriptive, disturbing images of a familiar scenario. I can feel the sigh of relief here:
"4 a.m. Home. Safe. Seventeen. Safe". Those little buggers, been there! thankfully, she is breathing. As you have declared, Hardened kittens would be hard to swallow, even hardened breast (at 17) won't do. The mention of her breasts seems gratuitous and doesn't really add anything to this fine piece of writing. Enjoyed it very much.
My best!
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"4 a.m. Home. Safe. Seventeen. Safe". Those little buggers, been there! thankfully, she is breathing. As you have declared, Hardened kittens would be hard to swallow, even hardened breast (at 17) won't do. The mention of her breasts seems gratuitous and doesn't really add anything to this fine piece of writing. Enjoyed it very much.
My best!
Heart