Scent of Plumeria

[billy]

Light pierced
my shuttered eyes "shuttered feels awkward. i presume it's a
merging synonym for blinkered"
hyperopic images
of the laced curtain
dancing
with the breeze like
the last moments of her
twirling
on a fabricated meadow
of my sleep.
Her Plumeria aroma
lingered,
but the reek
of the drooled pillow
insisted it was morning
and I was late for class.

I told my teacher that Morpheus
was a girl playing pranks
of keeping boys like me
asleep. She laughed.
I was only nine.

hyperopic, it's the first time i've seen it's use in a poem and i do understand what it means.

the first sentence runs on with 30 words. even the line breaks doesn't give the reader a breather. try to keep a sentence around the ten word or less mark. the haiku has 17 syllables which is considered the length of one breath.

try and cut any words that don't add.

the in L5, my in L11, the L15. once you sort out the sentence length you'll be able to cut a few more.

i think the enjambment could do with a bit of a overhaul.
IE;

I told my teacher that Morpheus
was a girl playing pranks
of keeping boys like me
asleep. She laughed.
I was only nine.

to;

I told my teacher
Morpheus was a girl
playing pranks
to keep boys like me
asleep.

She laughed.
I was only nine.

try to lessen the amount of gerunds.

all in all i enjoyed the excuse and the imagery in the poem. i think it has a freshness. i suggest keeping the last two lines separate as they're the punch line. jmo to use or discard. thanks for the read.