Play the violin again edit 2. leanne,serge.edit 1 milo,svan,rc,billy, serge et al

[tectak]

Edit 2

Play the violin again;
from hands that flit
let lightly slip
a sigh.
Fold forward into flesch
and scoop the ecstasy.
Sweep low and bow
to Symphony's allure.
Your tender notes will soothe the strings;
we rise, on softly wafting wings,
in air so thin, bells scarcely ring,
and there I hear the sky.

Edit 1
Play the violin again;
from hands that flit
let lightly slip
a sigh.
Fold forward into flesch
and scoop the ecstasy.
Sweep low to bow
to music’s tempting ways.
Your tender notes will soothe the strings;
we rise, on softly wafting wings,
in air so thin, bells scarcely ring,
and there I hear the sky.

Original:

Play the violin again;
let hands that flit so lightly
slip a sigh.
Fold forward into flesch
and scoop the ecstasy;
sweep low to bow
to music’s tempting ways.
Your tender notes will soothe the strings,
I rise on softly wafting wings
in air so thin, bells scarcely ring,
but there I hear the sky.

Tectak
1992

Can't give the best of feedback because I don't play violin but I believe abstractions are holding this piece back. When I say abstraction I mean words like ecstasy but to be honest I don't play or even listen to much violin. Thanks for posting

Ah well...to the bin with this one, then.
Best,
tectak