Shitty Villanelle

[tectak]

This thing has got some problems but I worked pretty damn hard at it if anyone can help me salvage it or give me some pointers on how to improve my writing I would be grateful. I post it in this section, because most people don't even know what a villanelle is. I think the refrain may be the problem here.

A bugle plays a hunter’s tune that’s cruel
It rouses hunting dogs that growl at Harts harts, or it's Tortoises always. I'm watching. tectak
In conquest men attempt to hunt and rule

Above the mantle antlers hang as ghouls
The heads of bucks that hounds have torn apart
A bugle plays a hunter’s tune that’s cruel

The sound of Martial trumpets signals drool
From trained beasts with shining purple hearts
In conquest men attempt to hunt and rule

He barks at heaven cursing limits. A fool
Whose unquenched hunger gnaws him apart.
A bugle plays a hunter’s tune that’s cruel

Actaeon turned stag when by the pool
Where naked beauty seen was not a tart
In conquest men attempt to hunt and rule

We men do covet Jewels, shining hearts
That glint a light that smarts the hunting fool
A bugle plays a hunter’s tune that’s cruel
In conquest men attempt to hunt and rule