Road-Kill

[milo]

Hmm... I disagree with you about the meter but you make good points on the syntax. Perhaps you have to capture a more natural speech when using blank verse but ending a line with quickly would be a metrical error. Good point on the brake pads. Also you make some other good points. Thanks for commenting. But it is spelled Navajo... What a Fucking mess.

ending with "quickly" is not a metrical error. Please see "Milo's rules for acceptable ip"

Rules for ip:

Lines should have 5 iambs and nothing else.

Exceptions:

there are some acceptable substituions in ip. Substitutions should be used to add emphasis or add to the reading. Substituions should NOT be used because the author cannot find an acceptable iamb.

acceptable sub:

1. Trochees can be substituted for any of the first 4 feet though earlier is better.

2. Double iambs (pyrrhic-trochee) should be used SPARINGLY.

3. Headless iambs can be used for first foot (9 syllable iambic line starting with a hard accent). NOT to be used in first line.

4. Fem endings.

5. Spondees can be used as a sub for any foot although shouldn't occur in the first line and no more than 1 per line. Also, shouldn't occur in line with a troche.


rule #4 - fem endings.