Play the violin again edit 2. leanne,serge.edit 1 milo,svan,rc,billy, serge et al

[Keith]

I'm a bit late to this so I have not read others crit just did mine for what it's worth.

Play the violin again;
let hands that flit so lightly
slip a sigh. why sigh? I like the flit slip but its lost, could break before lightly and let it stand out
Fold forward into flesch
and scoop the ecstasy;
sweep low to bow good use of double meaning
to music’s tempting ways.
Your tender notes will soothe the strings, solid line for a love poem
I rise on softly wafting wings not keen on wafting, suggest breathless to pick up thin air
in air so thin, bells scarcely ring, great image
but there I hear the sky. solid ending takes us to a higher level
Tectak
1992

Ah loves lost love, high above the clouds aside a mountain listening to distant church bell lost in the thin air, but then oh what must it be like to love someone so much you hear the sky. I enjoyed this very much. Best TOMH