"This is our world as we know it"

[milo]

This is how the world breathes:
Heavy and even, ebbing away stardust
Expelling gusts so strong, chilling
The universe shivers

This is how the world sleeps:
Pulling across the blanket of darkness
Sewing together pockets of sun
The night spreads

This is how the world hates:
Without reason or motive
In chains, in cells, in schoolyards
A child cries

This is how the world loves:
Passionately, like waves kissing shore
Forces of nature, fire lusting earth
The flowers grow

This is how the world dies:
Choked in the black from factories
Pocked, cracked, scarred from wars
By the human hand

This is how we are:
Imperfect, scattered across maps
Our actions pulse like footsteps
Forever coloring this world.

Hey, this is all pretty good! THere are some instances where you "tell" even when the reader can figure it out (by the human hand) and some vagueness (forces of nature, fire lusting earth) but some great spots too:

the world breathes heavy and even expelling stardust
sewing together pockets of sun
pulse like footsteps
etc.

Thanks for posting

milo