Lass

[Brownlie]

O how I dream of raven tresses,
Soft brown eyes that leave me breathless,
Angelic hands, and dainty feet,
A smile like sunshine, bringing me
Light in the darkness of my heart,
A love so pure, with no regard,
Of the demons who whisper in my ears,
O! How I hold this lass so dear!


I was kinda going for a little archaic feel in the poem...

It is mostly pretty good, you have managed to establish a meter and stick to it for 9 lines. The ninth line you could easily fix with dsomething like "ofDa demDum onDa whisDum persDa inDum? myDa ear Dum" or something.

I don't know about "in" as a dum