Lass

[heisenborg]

I think the "O!" definitely seals the deal as archaic and old-world lol. I like it a lot, good sir. The only criticism I would give it, if I may, is that the second to last line "Of the demons who whisper in my ears" may be a bit breathy, maybe just a syllable or two too long. That may be the style you're going for, but I felt like that line didn't flow in the same way, and kind of whisked me away from the old-world-ness of it, albeit for only a second...

Overall though, very nice work! I felt like I was brought along, not dragged along through it, it seemed animated enough to keep my attention, yet organized enough to lead me down a path. Bravo!