06-04-2013, 05:30 PM
It is not critique as such - but before you post, it is worth proof reading your poem for grammar and punctuation - it is only basic things, wrong use of your, capitals at the start of sentences, etc.
I like the personality that comes through, it is a short poem yet you have established a good character. I would say though that your line breaks seem a little erratic to me.
I like the personality that comes through, it is a short poem yet you have established a good character. I would say though that your line breaks seem a little erratic to me.
- Amy
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)