the starting line

[serge gurkski]

hi i'm really new but i enjoy writing poems

please offer any help its much appreciated:

the starting line...

I am standing at the edge of everything,
im stepping bewildered into myself,
i am searching out the details of my entire soul,
my entire self, the pinnicle of my purpose,
i am ill content and i will allways be so,
there is by far enough to taste and much to love,
ive a journey to make alone and it excites me to my core,

i and staring blindly into brightness that i cannot understand,
i am eternally at ease ,
i will not allow myself to slip freely into the divine grace of ignorace ,
i hold destiny within my hand,
i can do with it what i please,
i am free by my own will,
i am ultimately grateful...

welcome and cheers,

The Starting Line

I am standing at the edge of everything,
I am stepping bewildered into myself,
I am searching out the details of my entire soul,
my entire self, the pinnacle of my purpose,
I am ill-content and I will always be so.

There is by far enough to taste and much to love,
I have a journey to make alone and it excites me to my core:

I am staring blindly into brightness that I cannot understand,
I am eternally at ease.
I will not allow myself to slip freely into the divine grace of ignorance.
I hold destiny within my hand.

I can do with it what I please:
I am free by my own will,
I am ultimately grateful...

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If you had the kindness to post your post like this, I might have felt inclined to consider it. ;-)

Kids, what's wrong?
(Writing is NOT (for) fun).

It is for you, as I can see, but ...
to whose benefit?

You have good lines. why waste them needlessly? are you suicidal?

serge, mild and meek.

cheers!

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"The Starting Line

I am standing at the edge of everything,
I am stepping bewildered into myself,
I am searching out the details of my entire soul,
my entire self, the pinnacle of my purpose,
I am ill-content and I will always be so.

There is by far enough to taste and much to love,
I have a journey to make alone and it excites me to my core:

I am staring blindly into brightness that I cannot understand,
I am eternally at ease.
I will not allow myself to slip freely into the divine grace of ignorance.
I hold destiny within my hand.

I can do with it what I please:
I am free by my own will,
I am ultimately grateful..."

Very promising. Please, keep on posting, Ernest :-)

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this line here:
"I can do with it what I please:"

I'd change to: I can do with it AS I please ...