One of Those Days
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(05-26-2013, 01:56 PM)tadaki Wrote:  I'm back and trying again with something new haha Smile

I'll have a day where I'm all alone
Writing to some indie tune.
A day of cliches and artsy escapades
Where the irony of life shines through.

Of cookies and cream
And brown cakes on white plates;
Of chocolate and strawberry all funnily shaped,
To pierce with a fork and spoon.

Yea I'm gonna head down to some cafes
And try a glass of chai tea latte
And have myself one of those sunny little days
Where I just don't care about shit.

Too wordy? Too much tell and too little show? Tell me what u guys think haha Smile)
What is this about? I would avoid rhyming that sounds forced. Maybe checking out some poetry on youtube would help you out. There are also audio tracks you can listen to on this website.
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One of Those Days - by tadaki - 05-26-2013, 01:56 PM
RE: One of Those Days - by cidermaid - 05-26-2013, 05:27 PM
RE: One of Those Days - by tadaki - 05-27-2013, 12:05 AM
RE: One of Those Days - by Brownlie - 05-27-2013, 12:43 AM



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