The Reasoning

The Reasoning

HelenaHandbasket
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05-24-2013, 06:00 AM

I think you need to look at your line breaks and where you put them, they don't really add to the flow of the poem.
Also, I think it might be more effective as one stanza, maybe add some punctuation.
I really like the first two lines, I think they're very strong.

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The Reasoning - by Wildcard - 05-23-2013, 02:59 AM

RE: The Real Reason - by tectak - 05-23-2013, 03:03 AM

RE: The Real Reason - by HelenaHandbasket - 05-24-2013, 06:00 AM

RE: The Real Reason - by modern_poet - 05-24-2013, 06:06 AM

RE: The Real Reason - by billy - 05-24-2013, 12:08 PM

RE: The Real Reason - by Wildcard - 05-25-2013, 09:05 AM

RE: The Reasoning - by tectak - 07-28-2013, 05:37 AM

RE: The Real Reason - by serge gurkski - 05-25-2013, 10:49 AM

RE: The Reasoning - by Wildcard - 07-28-2013, 12:58 AM

RE: The Reasoning - by Wildcard - 07-28-2013, 07:10 AM

RE: The Reasoning - by billy - 07-28-2013, 11:01 AM

RE: The Reasoning - by Wildcard - 07-28-2013, 11:29 AM

RE: The Reasoning - by billy - 07-28-2013, 11:31 AM

RE: The Reasoning - by Wildcard - 07-28-2013, 11:32 AM

RE: The Reasoning - by heslopian - 07-28-2013, 12:09 PM

RE: The Reasoning - by Wildcard - 07-28-2013, 11:27 PM

RE: The Reasoning - by heslopian - 07-29-2013, 12:38 AM

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