The Tender (part 1 of 4)

[qwerty_H]

I am sure glad that you liked it!! Those French and their metaphors - maybe they should stick to wine?

I like that you think I have something to say, it makes me feel deep and important. - only for a second though.

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some of the images are very good

in time-acne'd stone

and the line above are exceptional. there are many others.
the real problems i face when i read the poem though are enjambment and sentence length.
enjambment;
the virgin growth was choked by ancient. the content works well though i';m struggling to come to terms with an innate arrogance of the 1st person comparison to the gods. man-strength made me think of erect penis

it feels like there is a forced (unneeded pause) at line end, some other lines are the same.

the 1st sentence is between 60 and 70 words longs, i and i presume many readers usually need time to breath. that extended pause a period allows. i accept that some poems are robust enough to take us helter skelter but felt that this wasn't one of those.

Yah, the first sentence is way too long, I will cut that down a bit, thanks. Line breaks too.

Thanks.