05-12-2013, 02:46 PM
(05-12-2013, 07:19 AM)justcloudy Wrote: Hi j. With the backstory this is lovely. Now put that story into the poem and you've got it. Looking fwd to an edit.Your feedback was the push I needed, justcloudy, thanks.
Here's the edit:
Four o'clock this morning
coffee's aroma leads
again to hunger;
she's sitting, writing poetry
forever sipping herbal tea-
hoping to meet at last,
the man who's inspired
her early morning writing;
he asks to meet
for coffee soon;
four in the morning
coffee brews,
paper is aroma.