05-11-2013, 06:49 PM
thats fine, (i took my request down 
the more feedback people give, the more they'll get. if you can try and be honest in what you say and say why or why not something works for you. thanks for listening
once we understand what we're doing (I'm still learning as well) we can add a cliche knowing it's a cliche. and make it do some work for us. but till then, i'd advise to stay away from them as much as possible. it doesn't matter about tense as long as it's constant. it sound like your trying to anthropomorphise the lightening, or that the flashes look vicious. if the latter then you should change the syntax you have to
their vicious look
what is meant by ' makes you go for it"
i suspecting you mean "run for it"
Their vicious look makes you run for it
the more feedback people give, the more they'll get. if you can try and be honest in what you say and say why or why not something works for you. thanks for listening
once we understand what we're doing (I'm still learning as well) we can add a cliche knowing it's a cliche. and make it do some work for us. but till then, i'd advise to stay away from them as much as possible. it doesn't matter about tense as long as it's constant. it sound like your trying to anthropomorphise the lightening, or that the flashes look vicious. if the latter then you should change the syntax you have to
their vicious look
what is meant by ' makes you go for it"
i suspecting you mean "run for it"
Their vicious look makes you run for it