05-08-2013, 07:04 AM
The frame you show us is almost film like and I'm running down the bank stripping as I run to join her, nice edit, very visual poem one minor comment below. TOMH
The Stream
Behind the willow's curtain,
tremulously i watched
as all voyeurs must,
wanting to be caught.
You stood at water’s edge,
seduced by summer's wind why wind? I was all hot and sticky needing to strip and bathe the wind spoiled it because I wanted heat.
it's pliable hands pressing.
Your outline thrilled me,
and I held you through light-dappled leaves. great line
A twirl, a swirl;
you danced on the blades of the bank,
mirroring eddies in the water.
With arms outstretched
to catch the cooling sun.
You stepped through the silvered surface
till it lapped the curve of your calf.
I returned behind tree trunks shade,
no screaming thought had room to breathe.
Closer, ever closer,
then splash, and splash again.
You sat within the willow's reach
and splashing, called my name.
The Stream
Behind the willow's curtain,
tremulously i watched
as all voyeurs must,
wanting to be caught.
You stood at water’s edge,
seduced by summer's wind why wind? I was all hot and sticky needing to strip and bathe the wind spoiled it because I wanted heat.
it's pliable hands pressing.
Your outline thrilled me,
and I held you through light-dappled leaves. great line
A twirl, a swirl;
you danced on the blades of the bank,
mirroring eddies in the water.
With arms outstretched
to catch the cooling sun.
You stepped through the silvered surface
till it lapped the curve of your calf.
I returned behind tree trunks shade,
no screaming thought had room to breathe.
Closer, ever closer,
then splash, and splash again.
You sat within the willow's reach
and splashing, called my name.
If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out