Senryuu

[Magpie]

yes, very nice flow after second read,
your use of alliteration is in my opinion very intelligent and adds another semantic layer, that tells the same story as the one conveyed by the meaning of the (complete) words you use. ;-)

I enjoyed the read.
cheers
serge

Thanks again Serge for your kind comments, it really does give me encouragement to know that people enjoy reading them. Also I appreciate the comments about alliteration which at first I didn't understand but after looking up alliteration, I do. I'm being educated all the time on this site, it is very much appreciated.
Thanks once again,
AR