05-06-2013, 01:09 AM
yes, very nice flow after second read,
your use of alliteration is in my opinion very intelligent and adds another semantic layer, that tells the same story as the one conveyed by the meaning of the (complete) words you use. ;-)
I enjoyed the read.
cheers
serge
your use of alliteration is in my opinion very intelligent and adds another semantic layer, that tells the same story as the one conveyed by the meaning of the (complete) words you use. ;-)
I enjoyed the read.
cheers
serge