05-04-2013, 06:56 PM
Is The Awakening a vampire/zombie novel? "Ennui" in that context was my attempt to be arty and clever; clearly it failed
The original word was "wasteland", but I thought that using "ennui" as a concrete noun would convey a wasteland while also adding a powerful emotional element.
When you say that the anger is unrefined, is that because of the expletives or the style/arrangement of the poem? The poem is about someone whose homophobic upbringing has created a tension with his innate gayness. Thank you for taking the time to give me honest and thoughtful feedback, Brownlie
Thank you for acknowledging my feedback, cidermaid, and I'll never chastise someone for giving me more comments on my poem
The last couplet was, admittedly, kind of an afterthought, and also a bit self-justifying. My explanation for that use of "ennui" is in my response to Brownlie. Thank you for your kind and helpful feedback, Bilbo, I'll apply a few of your suggestions in a moment
The original word was "wasteland", but I thought that using "ennui" as a concrete noun would convey a wasteland while also adding a powerful emotional element. When you say that the anger is unrefined, is that because of the expletives or the style/arrangement of the poem? The poem is about someone whose homophobic upbringing has created a tension with his innate gayness. Thank you for taking the time to give me honest and thoughtful feedback, Brownlie
Thank you for acknowledging my feedback, cidermaid, and I'll never chastise someone for giving me more comments on my poem
The last couplet was, admittedly, kind of an afterthought, and also a bit self-justifying. My explanation for that use of "ennui" is in my response to Brownlie. Thank you for your kind and helpful feedback, Bilbo, I'll apply a few of your suggestions in a moment
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe