04-26-2013, 02:41 AM
Hi,
I found your poem both hauntingly beautiful and slightly disturbing and not knowing anything about your subject, I looked up a referance for the sea of trees, and now I understand more of the images and emotion of this piece. My ignorance did not however effect the read and I think that the images and overall text works well without any prior knowledge of the subject.
Crit wise I would like to see some punctuation. A frequently repeated comment on the site from many (including myself) is that it is considered dated to start each line with a capitol letter and is disruptive to the flow of the read.
You have a nice style of writing and make good use of interesting images.
All the best AJ.
I found your poem both hauntingly beautiful and slightly disturbing and not knowing anything about your subject, I looked up a referance for the sea of trees, and now I understand more of the images and emotion of this piece. My ignorance did not however effect the read and I think that the images and overall text works well without any prior knowledge of the subject.
Crit wise I would like to see some punctuation. A frequently repeated comment on the site from many (including myself) is that it is considered dated to start each line with a capitol letter and is disruptive to the flow of the read.
You have a nice style of writing and make good use of interesting images.
All the best AJ.